I think "fabulous nuance" adds too much (or gives too much away). What needs to be added if you would skip it?
"a fabulous hue"
It's the "fabulous" that is the problem. It adds judging. Let the reader judge. Show -- don't tell.
"show -- dont' tell" yes,you have right ! thank you for the advice..
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I think "fabulous nuance" adds too much (or gives too much away). What needs to be added if you would skip it?
"a fabulous hue"
It's the "fabulous" that is the problem. It adds judging.
Let the reader judge. Show -- don't tell.
"show -- dont' tell"
yes,you have right ! thank you for the advice..
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